"I love you". My heart jumped out when it heard that proposal.
"Me too", I affirmed it to my dream girl.
And then later in the evening, that very heart felt like a victim when it heard,"I won the bet, my bait trapped him", she was counting her winning amount got from her friend.
P.S. - Tried to write 55 fiction after a long time and it is finished exactly in 55 words. Phew.
Also prompted at Three Word Wednesday
18 After Thoughts:
a very interesting twist indeed Deepak.. even my 55 fic for 3ww ended with 55 words, but then again, i always do end it with 55 words itself when i write one :)
sigh... :( :( it just makes me sad..love isn't a game to play..
A good tale in 55 words. I applaud you for the effort.
Love is no bet.
And if it is, winning love is also a loss sometimes!
Hmmm.. Nice but sad...
Aww... I never expected this twist.. Well written, 55 Fiction is most powerrful type as it conveys messages with just 55..
Yours Frendly,
Saravana Kumar M
Well expressed in 55 words.
Phew!! Poor victim...whatta bait!
I am enticed to write one 55 fiction!
keep sharing your thoughts, nice!
Its wonderful.said all in just 55 words..
:)
Wonderful 55 fic Deepak ! Sadly thats not fiction for many , love is often a game played by others ..Lovely written , a lot good than your 1st 55 fic :)
and bdw I am bk to commenting ..Sorry for my long absence :)
@ leo: thank u leo. and its a tough to end every 55 fiction in exactly 55 words :) only u can do it mate
@ tweety: thats true :(
@ ThomG: thank u sir :)
@ zave: well said my friend :)
@ guddu: thank u :)
@ someone: thanks a lot. sometimes more can be conveyed in less than 55 words or even without speaking :)
@ shail: thanks :)
@ amity: thanks a lot :)
@ sunakshi: thank god it took only 55 :)
@ adreamygal: thank u dear. and u should better be sorry. i'm not going to forgive u that easy :) kidding
Interesting twist.
@ anonymous someone: thanks :)
Excellent storytelling in this tiny tale. My heart goes out to the poor guy.
@ thomma: thank u :)
Good one Deepak. I admit the end is sad, but you told quite a story in just 55 words.
@ jay: thanks, I just tried to look it like a story, and I'm glad that it did :)
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