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I did wish a wish
and was promptly granted,
it was only you,
who I've ever wanted.
I loved and I cared,
for you, everything I did,
you didn't let me down,
you pampered like a kid.
The love was in the air,
the love was on it's peak,
as if we'd got everything,
anything else, we didn't seek.
From the heights of love,
we suddenly fell down,
we reached at it's peak,
now we were on ground.
This time I wished again,
this time you also did,
this time we wished together,
that our love be saved a bit.
Passing days in our thoughts,
spending nights without sleep,
is all we have to bear now,
is the treasure we have to keep.
I wish I hadn't wished,
I wish it hadn't been granted,
no matter I never got you,
no matter you ever remained wanted.
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25 After Thoughts:
weldone ..:-)
Beautifully brought out through such simple words! Loved the expression :)
All the best for BAT!
Wonderfully expressed....
All the best for BAT !!
Geeta
Dear Deepak,
Good Evening!
Simple lines expressed the theme very well.
Next time wish looking at the falling star,hands folded,chanting a prayer!
Life is a sum of additions and subtractions;don;t worry!
Keep dreaming and worth live a life to attain the dream.:)
The wish will be fulfilled.
Happy FIFA finals,
Sasneham,
Anu
I owe you a big thanks for this verse.
Its like exactly what I'm feeling right now!
Seriously, its like you've put down my thoughts in writing, which even I was scared to write.
And need I say, you've touched my heart?
@ vishal: thanku :)
@ surbhi: thanks a lot :-)
@ geeta: thanks to you too :)
@ anupama: well, i don't believe in the falling stars but yes, I do believe in the prayer. Thanks for such a caring suggestion :-)
@ zave: yaar, don't be too formal. I said or u said or someone else said doesn't make a difference. I'm glad that I touched ur heart through my writing. Winning a contest is never my motive but winning my readers' hearts is. thanks a lot :)
lovely poem :-). And congrats on the publication :-)
Simple words creates history.. You have done it..
I wish you a good luck for BATOM - 12
Saravana Kumar - Wish
Yours Frendly,
Saravana Kumar M
very good lines!!
the last para is just awesome, so magical and intense!!!
the yearning is superbly shown :)
best wishes for BAT12 :)
@ raajii: thank u so much :-)
@ someone: best of luck to u too :)
@ vivek: i too like the last para :-) thanks for the wishes :)
hI dEEPAK!
wHAT A WISH! Inspiring to read this is!!!
Nice poem here!
all the best for BATOM 12!
Terse,emotional and true.
Sort of the Chinese saying,"Beware what you wish for" !!
Lovely post
@ amity: thanks a lot for ur wishes :)
@ brijender: thanks to u too :)
Innocent is the first word that came to my mind after reading your lovely poem.
Hey,
This is Anandita. A first time visitor on your site. and hopefully here to stay.
You have a nice blog out here. You appeared on my Google Readers list and thats how i chanced upon your site. And also the other thing that brought me here was to reassure myself that CAs too have a life outside work and can write beautifully. (Me being in my final yr CA)
-A
Beautiful poem. Like Zave, it touched me too.
It's brilliant the way you've woven simple words together to create something as lovely as this.
All the best with BAT-12.
:)
simple lines, more impact and this is how i like poetry ...
loved the last two lines...
Hey Deepak.. a beautiful piece of poetry. Must commend u for the use of sch short lines and yet weaving each verse nicely :)
As for the emotions behind the poem goes, many of us have gone thru thm in our lives.. nicely conveyed..
keep participating and enriching this event :)
@ dhandal: Innocent? quite interesting. and yes, CAs can also write, there is no doubt about that. art is not the property of only
professional artists :-)
@ D2: thank u friend. I'm glad u like simplicity :-)
@ mahesh: me too loved the last two lines. After all, its the end that matters the most, isn't it? :-)
@ vipul: wow... its a special day for my blog that u visited here. I mean, the man behind Blog-a-Ton himself liked my poem. I'm really honored, seriously :-) thank u so much
Lovely poem...Having someone in ur life and 'not having' is worse than not having at all!!
Wonderfully expressed.
@ jaspreet: thats true, but this pain is for the lucky ones i guess :)
Pain very beautifully expressed.
Lovely poem.
@ dil se: thanks a lot :)
nice, simple & cool , all the best for blog-a-ton
simple yet beautifully woven verses
Good Wishes for BAT12!
Gkam - Wish
@ astro: thanks a lot :)
@ gkam: thanks, best of luck to u too :)
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