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What would you return for?
Roses will still be the red,
rains will always be wet.
move on in life instead,
I don't mind what I get.
What would you return for?
Love will always be in air,
no matter I'm not there.
Birds will sing as they do,
Listen or not, up to you.
What would you return for?
Night will be dark like now,
stars will twinkle somehow.
Moon may seem more bright,
but don't worry, it's alright.
What would you return for?
If I mattered you wouldn't have left,
I wish your heart I wouldn't have theft.
But love doesn't knock the door,
now I realize, never did I before.
What would you return for?
Nothing will change for you dear,
to you, it doesn't matter far or near.
Everything will be as same as before,
Then, what would you return for?
What would you return for?
But one wish I still want to fulfill,
though you're moving in life uphill,
That someday you turn back and see,
I'm not where you wanted me to be.
I've moved on as well, for sure,
Now, what would you return for?
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18 After Thoughts:
Interesting... and a very practical thought.
Life doesn't wait for us, and if somebody leaves us in between, we should not stay there for ever and move on.
All in all, an interesting poem.
Cheers
Blasphemous Aesthete
A nice read-strong verse makes it even more interesting. But it's sad too-people come and go as and when it suits them, and feel too surprised if ,on their return, they don't find the other one waiting for them.
All the best!
very nice post...apt for the topic... lets return for the results of BAt.. all d very best.. :)
namit
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@ blasphemous: yes, move on in life :-)
@ jaspreet: life doesn't wait for anyone :-) all the best to u too
@ namit: thank u, best of luck to u too
Thank you so much for the tag :) I'm quite busy with executive preparation..coz I'll be appearing for both modules in June.will take the tag as soon as possible :)
Hope you're doing good.
Take care. :)
Night will be dark like now,
stars will twinkle somehow.
Moon may seem more bright,
but don't worry, it's alright.
very well said
Nice, Deepak. Could relate well.
Nice poem Deepak.
Best for BAT
buddy, nice rhymming poem, apt for the theme return.. Loved it totally..
--Someone Is Special--
Wonderful. A return does take some thought. Nw i have one to get back to reading your's!
Cheerz...! ;)
@ sunakshi: Well, I think u have posted ur comment on wrong post. The tag post was previous to this. Anyways, concentrate on ur studies and I hope u will do well in ur executive modules as well. Best of Luck :)
@ muddassir: thanks a lot :)
@ kshitij: I wished no one had related to it :)
@ tikulicious: thanks :)
@ someone: thanks a lot buddy :)
@ kevin: thanks and most welcome here :)
A beautiful poem, Deepak. Your way with the lines is brilliant.
All the best with the BAT.
Very,very well written !
The thoughts,the words and the meter all move in tandem-and are a sheer delight to read.
Reminded me a little of Byron's When we two parted.
Amazing writing.
@ D2: thank u friend :)
@ brijender: I didn't feel like posting it first when it got completed, but I'm glad that I did and u liked :)
theres a fine line here between anger and remorse...logical words yet the wishing is all too evident.
@ sidra: thanks a lot, glad u liked it :)
Beautiful poem with a nice ending and a clear message.
However I found the below lines a bit out of synch. Seemed as if meaning was compromised to allow the rhyme.
If I mattered you wouldn't have left,
I wish your heart I wouldn't have theft.
But love doesn't knock the door,
now I realize, never did I before
@ the fool: thanks for pointing out, But when I wrote it, I didn't find it out of synch. By the way, thanks again my friend :)
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